Dr. Who

Thank you very much for the critique. I really appreciate feedback and tough feedback encourages me to excel. As for the spelling, I did mean to spell-check it but forgot ...

The dream is always the same. Perhaps it's real. Perhaps not. Perhaps it is my future, either way, it is done, for now, and it's time for me to awake. ...

Ok, I'm not goignt to full out critic you right now. I just wanted to give you some encouragement. I really liked the way you made Zach all flirty. The ...

I thought it was pretty good. The imagrey was good once you got going. However, you might want to work on showing and not just telling. For example: instead of ...

Show, don't tell. For example: instaed of the priest saying "after him!" you could say: "The priests sandles slap slap slaped againt the sandy road as he pursued the runaway ...

The Force of Two- Chapter 1 "We have your mother, unless you come alone with $300,000 to the big clock at Merritime Square, you will never see her again. You ...